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. . . A Psychological Profile

The victim's shoulders tensed. She was bracing herself for impact. Her life was being challenged by a wild-eyed derelict. Oblivious to her begging, he continued the assault. He saw something beyond her that wasn't worth saving. He grabbed her by the neck with both hands and pulled her off the floor. She flung her arms up and down and was clutching at the air. Her back arched, and she collapsed. The derelict let her hit the floor and waited a few minutes. He didn't see her move so he kicked at her several times, but still he saw no movement.

Her seven year old daughter watched in horror. Her world was spinning and there was nothing she could do about it. Her mother's death would stay with her for the rest of her life. It was a permanent mental scar.

That same derelict was being questioned the next day as a suspect to the many stay at home mom killings. There was a serial killer who would murder mothers in front of their children as a sport. He got a rise watching the children witness the death of their mothers.

The derelict was a professional killer, a misfit, trained in the shadows, and that's where he did his killings. Kimber and Chambers knew that an absence of remorse would probably be coupled with rationalization in the derelict's mind. The suspect behind the two-way was not intimidated by the attempt of getting a confession.

Detective Laura Kimber was inches away from his face as she felt his warm breath warming her cheeks. The derelict's smile went away for a moment, and both of the detectives' faces looked sad and perplexed.

Detective Nathan Chambers wanted to slam the derelict's face into the wall, and beat a confession out of him, but that was not possible. Even though he was suspected of killing, he was still protected by law. He was innocent until proven guilty.

“Interrogations should be done by a chair, chains and two hungry pit bulls,” said Chambers.

The image of the derelict chained to a chair with two hungry pit bulls just inches away from his face put a smile on Kimber's face, although it didn't last, it was a smile nonetheless.

Kimber and Chambers really had nothing on him, but rumors, suspicions and a psychological profile.

“Killing those women doesn't bother you?” Kimber shouted as spit splattered all over the suspect's face. He ignored it, and didn't even wipe it off.

He just flashed all of his teeth and replied with a smug expression. “I honestly don't care about those women. Their deaths do not impact me one way or another. They're just victims, but not by my hands. I couldn't kill in front of children. I don't think I could.”

“You don't have a conscious,” Kimber said through clenched teeth.

The derelict was shaking his head. “Probably not.”

Chambers was on the case for almost nine months and this was the closes he got. His life became miserable. His private life was being compromised and his relationship with his wife was reduced to sex once every month, and arguments which increased to twice a day. Either by cell phone or texts. He loved his wife and she loved him, but cases like this really put a wedge in their marriage.

Kimber needed to keep the interrogation going until he asked for a lawyer. If she kept talking, he might just forget to do so. “Sit there and play dumb. I know you're smart as hell.”

“You have the wrong guy,” said the derelict. “I think maybe murders are not your bag a tea. You may just be in over your head, little girl.”

Chambers lost it after that remark. He punched the derelict in the face knocking him backwards off the chair. The derelict got up slowly, straightened up the chair and sat back down. He rubbed his chin where he was punched and said. “Yeah, that's going to leave a mark.”

“He attacked me,” said Kimber. “But you clocked him before he got his hands on me.”

“That will work.”

Chambers glanced back over to the derelict, who seemed to be enjoying the interrogation. The smile on his face seemed exaggerated which suggested amusement. It was so difficult to comprehend the situation. He would murder a mother in front of a crying child, used and discarded. It was a monstrous sacrifice to an unmistakable evil.

Detective Peter O'Brien entered the interrogation room without knocking. He had some exciting news that he needed to share.

“Pete, we are in the middle of something,” said Kimber.

“We caught the crazy son of a bitch,” O'Brien continued. “He was stabbed by the child while choking the mother.”

“What?” Chambers' eyes were wide.

O'Brien handed Chambers the file with everything needed for an arrest including warrants and a full confession. Chambers opened the file and somewhere in the midst of the fifth page, he paused long enough to think about a few things.

“Let him go?” Kimber asked.

He nodded slowly.

“You're free to leave,” Kimber said without even looking at the derelict.

The derelict stood up and stopped in front of Detective Laura Kimber. “You know little girl.”

“Don't push your luck,” she said softly and slowly.

“You know that he could be a copy-cat,” the derelict started. “I mean, if I were going to kill that mother, I certainly wouldn't give the child the opportunity to get a knife and then stab me. I'd make the choking so violent that it'll freeze the child in place. Think about that. Of course I am innocent, but if I was the serial killer, that's how I would do it, little girl.”

Kimber held her cool, but the anger rose.

“Aren't you going to tell me not to leave town?” said the derelict as he slowly paced toward the door.

Kimber bit her lower lip. “Don't leave town just yet.”

The derelict smiled and walked out.


© 2016 Frank Atanacio


Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on November 28, 2017:

thank you so much Nell Rose

Nell Rose from England on November 28, 2017:

That was so good! lol! I wanted him to slip up, but darn it, he got away! and yes he did it! didn't he?

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on January 27, 2017:

thank you so much James

James Michaud on January 20, 2017:

my goodness, this was very explosive so much in such a short piece. What's this now, flash fiction? I enjoyed it very much

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on July 25, 2016:

thanks for stopping by MsDora

Dora Weithers from The Caribbean on July 25, 2016:

Please that Kimber delivered a punch in the face before letting the vagabond go. Did I write that?

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on July 15, 2016:

thank you pstraubie..:) bless you

Patricia Scott from North Central Florida on July 14, 2016:

We have had our share of serial killers here in our glorious state, sadly. I often wonder what swirls around in their head at any given moment.

Believable characters make this work....

Angels are headed your way this morning ps

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on July 13, 2016:

Savvydating, Genna east.. Missy and Mckbirdbks.. thank you guys for your comments I really appreciate you guys checking out my Profile...

Missy Smith from Florida on July 13, 2016:

What can I say, Frank? If the story was real, I could be one of his victims and my children the ones permanently scarred from the scene. In that way, it really tore at my insides. It made me quite sick! Although, if the victim was me, that b*****d would have had his hands full, I wouldn't go down so easy, especially, with my kids around. F**k that!!

I agree with the others, you really should write a sequel to this, and it would be fun for you to make a mother the end hero. It would make sense, a lot of us that have had so many trials in raising our children on our own, for whatever reason, would be extremely pumped with adrenaline if someone like this person came in and attempted to do harm to our family, who we have sacrificed so long for, with no father figure to help out.

I can see myself beating the holy hell out of this derelict, tying him up, placing a mask on his face that resembled my daughter's father for sure and taking my time beating the s**t out of him. Afterwards, right before I end his life, I would make him beg for mercy. Then, I would take off the mask and smile the same type of smile this character did before I stabbed him in the heart looking at him straight in the eyes.

I bet you are saying I'm either crazy or have a vivid imagination, right? lol. I can only say, I may or may not have thought about this scenario when it comes to my children's fathers through the years. Haha... ;)

Good story as always, Frank. I hope you didn't mind me putting my own take on a final plot. And I promise I hold no more animosity toward my exes, but this type of thing happening to me personally could just bring those feelings of hurt and abandonment right back up in a dangerous way for that killer. ~Missy

Yves on July 13, 2016:

Can't say that I'd handle the derelicts smugness as well as Kinder did. I guess with experience, detectives learn not to let the creeps get inside their skin. On the other hand, having to deal with evil day in and day out pretty much means that the evil will seep into your pores. How difficult it must be to wash out the filfth. Great story, Frank. Very compelling.

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on July 13, 2016:

thank you so much Cam, manatita and Flourish anyways for checking out my profile..bless you guys :)

Genna East from Massachusetts, USA on July 10, 2016:

Oh, Frank, I hope there's a sequel in the works this story, with this psychopath getting his comeuppance. Your words and imagery are so real -- I think we all want to see this happen. This "thing" is evil incarnate. And your story gives chills. I liked Mike's idea about the cast.

mckbirdbks from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas on July 09, 2016:

You painted that nasty little creep just right. Sounds to me like Chambers and Kimber needed one short fifteen minute break (of his arm) prior to letting him go. Hard to strangle someone with a cast on one arm.

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on July 08, 2016:

Venka, Jodah and Clive thank you so much for visiting my profile :)

FlourishAnyway from USA on July 08, 2016:

Wow. Now get to his mommy issues!

manatita44 from london on July 07, 2016:

Nice! Nice! You had me laughing at the end. They were both playing a game and perhaps the Derelict won. Round 1. Ha ha. Excellent work, Bro.

Chris Mills from Traverse City, MI on July 07, 2016:

Memories of Hannibal Lector. Excellent portrayal of the bad guy.

Clive Williams from Jamaica on July 07, 2016:

sex once every WHAT!!!?? Ok good story frank but the gardner may have to fill that gap

John Hansen from Gondwana Land on July 07, 2016:

A gripping story, Frank. It must be hard for detectives when they are sure they have caught a serial killer and find out they are wrong in the middle of an interrogation, especially when the subject is taunting them. Their instincts are usually right however and it is likely he is guilty of something else equally horrendous. I am sure Kimber and Chambers will get him for something eventually.

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on July 07, 2016:

Faith it is always good to see you flashing around my pages.. hope you are having a wonderful summer with your family.. keep on trucking little girl (LOL ) joking cause you said that teed you off..:) bless you big time ...Frank

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on July 07, 2016:

Always thank you for always checking out my flashes..bless you

Venkatachari M from Hyderabad, India on July 07, 2016:

Very interesting and exciting. I too hope there is going to be a sequence for it.

Faith Reaper from southern USA on July 06, 2016:

Whoa, Frank, you certainly take us right into the room there with that sociopathic lowlife creep ...woo, you made me want to slap that smirk right off his face and then something worse! His "little girl" remarks really steamed me even more so, and I know Kimber too, but I guess that's his way of getting to her. I hope there's a sequel here so Kimber can deal with that creep once and for all.

There's no doubt you're the Master of the gritty flash fiction. Truly a psycho profile! As always, your titles rock too.

Keep up the great writing.

God bless you and keep you

Ruby Jean Richert from Southern Illinois on July 06, 2016:

The dirty rat, she'll get him the next time! You have a way of telling a story that puts me in the room, cheering Kimber on. Loved it!!!

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on July 06, 2016:

I agree Dana, thanks for stopping by :)

Dana Tate from LOS ANGELES on July 06, 2016:

Sounds as if this fool has "mommy issues" This was one of your most grittiest characters Frank, anyone who could kill in front of a child truly has no soul.

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on July 06, 2016:

LOL@ Eric.. they will.. and thanks.. of course Diego I'll check out your thriller.. thanks for stopping by guys :)

Diego Esperante from Mexico on July 06, 2016:

My kind of story, excellent. I actually wrote something "similar" about a serial killer who narrates how he found his victims. I'd appreciate it if you gave it a read. Thank you.

Eric Dierker from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A. on July 06, 2016:

Awesome! Wow the intensity is just amazing. Maybe I watch too many cop shows but I could visualize the whole thing. I say copy cat. Tail that bastard and dig up some dirt on him.

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on July 06, 2016:

thank you so much Billybuc and Shyron for reading my profile..:)

Shyron E Shenko from Texas on July 06, 2016:

Very dark and sad, I hope that you will continue this until the evil man is behind bars, and maybe the next victim's child will have read about the other child that stabbed the killer and follow their lead, and get the evil creep out of our world.

Good writing Frank

Blessings my friend

Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on July 06, 2016:

Dark...gritty...my kind of story!!!! Love these characters, Frank!

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